i like the rhythm and the grit of it..
but you really need to s-p-r-e-a-d out those instruments...
besides the synth, pretty much everything was centred throughout... play the same rhythm guitar twice over and pan one hard left and one hard right (or, at least, 50-50)... drums can go wider too... that way, if someone puts vox on this, they've got space for them.
besides that, this was pretty fuckin shit hot :D