getting there
both schlief and dk84 have left some very good feedback... dunno if i need to add much.
yeah, the mic thing... i use a "large diaphragm condenser mic" they're really sensitive... i mean, i stand about an arm's length from the mic and am still sometimes too close. Using one of those really gets the true sound of your voice into the mix... look into it, they're not cheap and you generally need "phantom power" to run them.
like schlief said... there's glimpses of your "real" metal voice coming through... but often falls away to a sort of whisper. It will come in time... practise and a bit of pain. It's all good!
keep it up bro